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February 1
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In the deep dark forest,
amidst the children's cries,
crickets are constantly chirping
their soft lullabies.

In the deep dark forest,
where the only light comes
in green and white
with a cackle and a hum

In the deep dark forest,
where the shadows abide
deep within the monster's cave,
you'll be terrified.

In the deep dark forest,
all the willows weep
for lost loves and broken hopes;
Promises they couldn't keep.

In the deep dark forest,
depending on what you see,
the light of dawn may be your hope.
Or rather in darkness, would you be?

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I can't remember when I wrote this, probably almost a year ago. I liked it though, so I spruced it up and threw it on google docs. There it sat until now! I gave it another touching up, and I think I'm quite satisfied with it. I read it to my little sisters, since I kinda wrote it to be kid-ish, and they really liked it. :)

I need to learn how to write poetry that isn't so repetitive. :| I'm open to critique!
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:iconmykingdomfan:
This was really good sis! I am very impressed with these last two poetry, its very good. I cannot wait to see if you get more of these. Keep it up :D
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~Lartovio Feb 3, 2013  Student General Artist
Thanks! :D
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:iconwaytodawn324:
Why are you so awesome? Like really, I'm feeling a bit inferior to you right now. Really great poem. I loved it!
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~Lartovio Feb 2, 2013  Student General Artist
Aww... Don't feel like that! But, thanks!
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*Rovanna Feb 1, 2013   Digital Artist
I don't know anything about poetry, but I like the repetitiveness! It sounds like it would make a good picture book or children's rhyme. :)
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~Lartovio Feb 2, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you! <3
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